Lyric help/Critique?

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    willowispembers

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    Lyric help/Critique?

    Post by willowispembers on Thu Oct 14, 2010 9:16 pm

    Hello. ^^
    Um, I'm working on a song for my Utau, and I have most of it finished, but I can't think of what to write for the lyrics, or even the title... I was just wondering if I could get a few suggestions maybe if you didn't mind? Also if you don't mind, could you maybe critique it? It's the first time I've used a program like this, so it would help a whole lot. ^^
    Here's the song: 4shared.com/audio/1YTH1Ssh/guitah2.html
    The player isn't the usual video player for some reason. Instead it's right below the download button on the left.
    Thank you very much. ^^


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    Re: Lyric help/Critique?

    Post by hello8bit on Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:54 pm

    Um.. mind uploading as an MP3? My computer doesn't like this wile format..
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    Re: Lyric help/Critique?

    Post by Ezri on Tue Oct 19, 2010 6:25 pm

    I think that maybe there should be a little more guitar variation...that one little riff gets kinda old. XD But the drums are great!

    *might do a more in-depth critique later, if I can convey my thoughts correctly*

    As for lyrics, I haven't got a clue. 8D
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    Re: Lyric help/Critique?

    Post by willowispembers on Wed Oct 20, 2010 5:18 pm

    Ok sure! I just changed it to mp3, I'm sorry about that. ^^

    Thank you very much! I thought it was kinda repetitive, but I wasn't really sure. Thank you for your help, I'll work on the guitar too. ^^
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    Re: Lyric help/Critique?

    Post by hello8bit on Wed Oct 20, 2010 5:48 pm

    It's pretty catchy for something to play in the beginning, but I wouldn't want to hear it throughout the whole song.
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    Re: Lyric help/Critique?

    Post by willowispembers on Sun Oct 24, 2010 9:20 pm

    Okay, I'll be sure to fix that part then. Thank you very much! ^^

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