Original song help

Hey, recently I made this:

http://zenywolf.deviantart.com/art/Innocence-160526289

It was pointed out to me by Myst that the part about "Ideal and reality" sounds too much like Hatsune Miku's "Innocence" song. I was wondering if anyone could help me find a better line. That particular part is supposed to represent the time frame between the toy's blue print phase and the time it was actually manufactured.

I really put a lot of heart into this one, and it would be depressing if one or two similarities with an already popular song stopped it from being original. Please I ask someone to help me, as I truly love these lyrics deeply.

I'd like to one day make an UTAU song for it in Japanese.

To be honest...

Leave them as they are. You were UNINTENTIONALLY INSPIRED, okay? You should never, never, never change what you have written. Never.

But that's from my point of view, I guess others can see this different...

smeen wrote:To be honest...

Leave them as they are. You were UNINTENTIONALLY INSPIRED, okay? You should never, never, never change what you have written. Never.

But that's from my point of view, I guess others can see this different...

Yeah, I've been told this. I just didn't want to hear "OMG RIP OFF" whenever I went around into making this into an actual song. At this point though, I don't care so much.

Although, I would like suggestions on what kind of beat would be in the background. I was thinking of something with pianos and violins.

Well, from the lyrics, it seems like it might be a good ballad-type song, pianos and violins would definitely be a good idea. And maybe a music box/glockenspiel, too. ^__^

Chasing Fireflies wrote:Well, from the lyrics, it seems like it might be a good ballad-type song, pianos and violins would definitely be a good idea. And maybe a music box/glockenspiel, too. ^__^

Ah, thanks for the suggestion. Yeah, I can picture something of a "childish toybox" kind of mood. I don't really know how to explain it.

I agree with the music box idea!

Ah, that sounds good. My plan is to commission someone at some point to make the background song. I have someone in mind but it'll be pricey. It will be totally worth it though.

I'd need a Japanese translator too and someone who can guide me through the UST making process.

This is all long term planning, of course.