Fireflies (Trem, English)--First Verse w/pitch bends

That's right, I jumped on the bandwagon. :D

I love this song anyway, though.

So here's the first verse:
http://www.4shared.com/audio/R_-O4Ny5/firefliespv1.html

Feedback would be welcome. Any suggestions would be welcome, too. On anything, really.

EDIT: The song is 'fireflies' by Owl City, if you don't know. sorry, I forgot to mention that.

i hear some clicks D:
but other than that i think it's nice c:

Some clicks and she sounds really robotic just because of lack of dynamics. Dx
But the words are really understandable, so its all good.

First off...I LOVE OWL CITY.

Second off...Trem is really starting to grow on me. =D

I agree with Halo to the extent that there's not any emotion YET...but I'm sure you can fix that. :3 Just a little tweaking and it'll be perfect.

Awesome, thanks everyone!

I'll add some pitch bends etc. when I can to give her some more emotion. I wasn't sure if I should add it or not, but now I'm going to And I'm going to try to figure out why those stupid clicks keep happening, ugh... I can usually get rid of them, but these ones elude me

*runs off to edit*

All right, pitch bends! And stuff!

I would have more, but UTAU's freaking out on me right now, so I'm just going to post what I have...

http://www.4shared.com/audio/dh2D1nIy/fireflies.html

I tried to imitate the pitch bends that the Owl City guy does in the original song--does she sound convincing?

(sorry for the double post...)

Wow, she sounds good! ^^ I love how understandable she is! The only thing I thought was weird was that it sounded like she said "tea-drops" (like...drops of tea. XD)

Ezri wrote:Wow, she sounds good! ^^ I love how understandable she is!

Thank you!

Ezri wrote:
The only thing I thought was weird was that it sounded like she said "tea-drops" (like...drops of tea. XD)

yeah, her 'rr' sound that I tacked on at the end there decided to go AWOL on me at the last minute, so I'm going to have to re-render that... thanks for mentioning it though, it helps to know that other people hear it, lol.