Critique Thread- Get peoples opinions on your works!

xMienaiTsubasa wrote:Also, it's just a minor point, but some people would prefer an UTAU to use Japanese r sounds or l sounds to English r sounds.

Aaagh, yes, I recorded the entire Act2 voicebank in one night, and didn't realize until later that I'd used English r-sounds by mistake. I'll fix 'em asap xD;;

@Yanyu: I agree with you about character designs. I am trying to design a more unique outfit; the one she currently has is kind of a default. Though I do think I'll keep the design somewhat "Vocaloid-y" simply because it fits Sakiko's backstory- She idolizes the Vocaloids, after all.

And thanks; I'll put up her voicebank sometime to get some feedback on that.

@ moonlight the wolf
Glad to help :D
If you'd like the english patch it's in the download section of the forum~

@ Saki-chan ;D

:D That's good *whipes forehead* I'm glad there are people who agree with me~ Can't wait to see the updated version of your utau :D

May I have Crituqe on Siana please? Be as harsh as you want. I want to improve and make her as best as possible. There's no fun to be had to make an utau that nobody will like.

and her concept art is right here.

I've always really liked Siana, ever since you started on her back when I was working on Chi and Siana was still a Vamploid ((Too bad Chi never got done properly. xD They could have been Lesbian Vamploids together. *shot*)), but I think you might need a new mic for her next act... She's kind of muffled. ouo

Agreed with Yume, maybe a little oto.ini tweeking too? I'm not sure since the karaoke was a bit loud/she was too quiet for me so I couldn't hear her sing probably, but she does sound good so theres not much problems. Just muffledness is a main problem.


Picture: Maybe ask for some artwork or get a reference for a pose you like (I'm not promoting copying/tracing though that's not how you should improve your drawing skills) and then design her because your anatomy isn't very good. Practice does make you improve! So don't give up!

@MariRoseTair

Her voice is very cute sounding, but I can't understand her DX That sounds like a combination of muffled recordings, otos and her being too quiet, like Yanyu and Yume already said.

Picture of your UTAU:



Name: 市音ルナ Ichine Luna

Age: 14

Height: 154.9 cm

Weight: 51.4 kg

Personality: None Defined. Taken to be bipolar

Paired with(if none, leave blank) : I will get shot 234720395 times, but actually her most supported pairing is with Len. It was originally crack.

Character Item: Tazer. Character item is fanbased.

Video or Video's of them:

ACT3:


ACT4:
http://www.4shared.com/audio/uyLuUt52/PANTSUUUUUUUU.html

SOFT APPEND:
http://www.4shared.com/audio/n6q5BUoI/DSTpreview.html


im really looking for crits on her act4 and soft append's voice. ono'

I'd love some critique on my UTAU ;D

Name: Jessi Maki
Personality: NONE YET ;A; /fail
Item: Well, it's more of an animal... She likes bats >w<;

just as a note, i changed her english r's to japanese ones earlier today so in the video they're still english x____x;

this is also pre-OTO...



After OTO...



Picture...

Spoiler:

Username: Haji_Kyone.

Preferred name: Greta.

Specialties: Drawing, singing and stuff like that.

I.critique.way.too.much...when critique is needed.

@Luna, I cannot give you critique, because that would only be biased praising... So I'm ignoring that little post you made... The only thing I can say is that her soft append actually does sound like a soft append and not like normal Luna, but that doesn't help you a bit...

@Kolya-kun, Her voice is good, but she's somethimes hard to understand and her 'sh' sounds like someone who is having speech problems... Don't get me wrong if you actually have 'em, I have them too... But they're... icky.

Thank you Yume, Yanu and Mienai for your opinions, I'll hopefully be getting a new mic once I'm not so... Broke and money-problem filled haha. x-X So the mildness will be gone.

and I'll practise on my anatomy. ^^;;

@smeen thanks, i'll work on clarity and rerecord those darn "sh-" sounds again... even when im just talking they sound pretty gross, haha

@Luna
...I'm... um... having a hard time thinking of something to critique you on. xD I'm too much of a Luna-fan like Smeen... :'D

@Kolya-kun
Her voice is very soft so it's a little hard to hear her, but I did notice your sh sounds were a little bit wonky.
Making a strong append for her or something of the like would widen her possibilities.
She has a lot of potential though, and once you fix the few small problems she has, she'll definitely be a good UTAU. :3

@Yume Barauta ok, thank you, but im still new and stuff and dont get all the terminology >A<;;

would a strong append just be singing louder? or do i shout or something~?

Luna wrote:I'm really looking for crits on her act4 and soft append's voice. ono'

ACT4

Voice-
First thing; I find Luna a bit generic and VERY Nasal.
But nasal UTAUloids are hard to avoid. ^^'' So it's kinda okay.
Hm... The only thing that makes me be all "oh, generic but that's fine" is the fact she has a slightly airier voice than most. ^^ Makes her really cute.

Configuration-
Seems fine. I think occasionally I'm hearing some consonants being cut off a little, but it's not too noticeable.

Design-
THE THING I LIKE LEAST ABOUT LUNA.
BUT DON'T WORRY. IT'S THE TWINTAILS.
I think the twintails are a bit... well, rip-off/generic. Same with the Crypton belt, skirt and armwarmers.
I LOVE her shirt. > 3<'' It's nice and ORIGINAL, plzkthnx And stripy socks/tights are awesome <3

Miscellaneous-
....Can't think of anything. Purple makes me happy?

SOFT

Voice-
Wonderful.
She sounds more mature, way less generic, and pretty realistic for CV. > 3<'''
Can't really think of much, sorry. Dx

Configuration-
No comment. *Can't tell*

Kolya-kun wrote:I'd love some critique on my UTAU ;D

Voice-
I find the tone of her voice to be really quite generic.
And the English r's annoy me to no end, even though I know you fixed them OTL
Overall her pronunciation is fine.

Configuration-
I think there's something off here. I'd need to see the VB to know for sure, but occasionally I can't hear the consonant or there's a gap.

Design-
Well, to be honest, I think she's pretty awesome in this department. No Crypton, and a lovely non-kei boxart <3
But she's just a little plain. That isn't always bad though. XD She has cute horns.


Sorry, I'm really tired today, guys, so my C&C isn't the best.

@Kolya-kun
Well, louder, yes, but more forceful, too, think of maybe a rock singer or somebody in a musical.
As for your UTAU, the pronunciation on her consonants could be clearer (I can't hear them very well) but her design is so cute! ^__^ I love the little horns.

Picture of your UTAU: Box Art Art by TFOTR

Name: Kenji Baionoto (Japanese Reading: Baionoto Kenji) (Japanese Text: 倍音音ケンジ )

Age: 14 (Soon to be 15 on July 11)

Height: 5ft 8in

Weight: 165lb (Unknown in kg)

Personality: Playful, yet serious, and kind. When an overly serious situation occurs (such as death of one he wanted to protect, loved one, etc), he starts laughing in denial, and starts acting unlike himself. Non-perverted. When the full moon is out, he's very calm, very serious, yet still very kind, and has an air of warmth around him. (His eye color also changes to a scarlet color)

Backstory (if you have one, if you don't, leave blank): A werewolf from America, Kenji is a schoolboy who loves technology. He cannot grow "older" physically, due to being a werewolf. He wasn't originally a werewolf- the gene that made him so was dormant until he turned 14, where he grew ears and a tail, and gained the ability to transform into a anthropomorphic wolf and a normal wolf, both being white with blue streaks. For a while after this, he was targeted by a tribe of were-wyerns, in which he fought for a bit of time, until he fought and defeated Ibitsu Hakureioto, who is now a fellow Crossloid (unreleased at that), one of the were-wyerns and son of the leader. They had only backed off however, due to the fact Kenji had taken the time to take Ibitsu to a hospital and restore him to full health. The two are now friendly rivals.

Paired with(if none, leave blank) : Cheria Sakuranbone (Unreleased)

Character Item: Keychain

Video or Videos of him: Cover of "The Wonderlast" Cover of "Toeto"

The Voicebank: http://www.mediafire.com/?xynom0dhhz2

I'm thinking about joining the wall of critiques, but I would like to know what everyone else thinks of Kenji, first. :> I've seen some pretty good critiques here (I mean that as in the format) and I hope I can get some too for Kenji. (I honestly think the design is... basic.)

@Haloheroine
@Chasing Fireflies

about the generic-ness, iiii'm not really sure how to fix that, 'cause i'm a ridiculously bad singer x___x; if i try to pitch things they get weird, accents come out weird, and singing airy + my mic = scritchscratch-sounding or hard to understand

i'll try my best though xDD;

i'll also start my "hard append" today, so expect me to be coming back to this thread soon :>

I'd love some critique on my UTAU.

copypaste from VO
Picture of your UTAU: [link]

Name: Amilia Enne (縁音アミリア)

Age: 15

Height: 1,65 m

Weight: 60 kg

Personality: She acts childish most of the time, and enjoys blowing bubbles and playing on the swings. Amilia is usually quite loud, to the point of annoying other people. She is very afraid of supernatural things. Whenever she sees/hears something scary, she tends to curl up in a corner of the room while covering her ears and closing her eyes. She enjoys spending time with her sister, and is very protective over her.

Backstory: In her past, she was a guyish girl. But, while growing up, she started to act girlier, even though she disliked it. This brought her to a point where she didn't even want to grow up anymore and started doing childish things.

Paired with: She likes stalking Len... but I'm not going to pair them up since no one will like it.

Character Item: Bubble blower stick

Video or Video's of them:


(This is her old art, ignore it!)

Their Voicebank: ACT1

@AngelKissHikari, Her 'R' sounds are somewhat English... And there is something else, but I don't really know what. Her voice sounds a bit off. I dunno how to explain it though...

@ Lupin, I have hardly any problems with Kenji's voice at all...he's awesome~! I agree with you about your design though~! But since it's Kenji some people might miss his old design ahaa (unless it's fabulous and really suits him and his age)...what a problem. *hasn't helped at all OTL sorry*

@ AngelKissHikari

I think her design is nice, but I think the bright light blue and white is a bit... you know. It's a simple and lovely design but my problem is with the colours. I just can't explain it right... there's too much? and nothing to give it some contrast or warmth? Maybe there should be more harmonizing colours or maybe contrasting colours... (sorry if I didn't help much just sharing my thoughts)

I agree with smeen about her 'r' sounds and I think the other thing is either the sound files quality or something? or maybe the mic quality (same thing maybe OTL)? I'm not too sure either ahaha...

I would love some critique on Shiroki. :'D

Name: Shiroki Aratane

Age: 13

Height: 5'1

Weight: 90lbs

Personality: Bubbly and optimistic, but rather shy, especially towards the opposite gender.

Character Item: Waffles

Character Art:

Spoiler:

(I know, she looks kinda generic, but I got really attached to her and her design, so I don't wanna change it. XD
I was thinking of getting rid of her armwarmers though.)

EDIT: I forgot to add voice samples lol.

crashflashbang wrote:I would love some critique on Shiroki. :'D

Oh, she's so cute! xD I love her color scheme! I really think her design is good! :3 The armwarmers might seem a little Vocaloid-y, but that doesn't bother me much at all, so whatever! I love it! XD

As for her personality, it seems a little overdone, but in all honesty that doesn't bother me much either. ouob Realistically, not everyone can be super weird and quirky, right? XD

Overall, good job!

I need some Critique on my UTAU :3

Spoiler:

I've been working on an English cover for awhile now... But I'm supaaa slow anyway... aha.
Would I be able to get opinions on it? http://twaud.io/hxP
It's Lovefool by the Cardigans...
It's not done yet (missing the talk parts near the end) but I reaaally would like to know what other people think is wrong with it so that I may make it better /before/ I make the PV.

I'm glad this thread is here or I wouldn't be sure where to post this xD